Tracing Desire Lines

Has the line

 Between the living and the dead

Distorted, So much

That only a flickering hug

Like a candle in the dark,

Could reassure it

Of its inhabitance.

Reassuring that without one,

There is no other,

Yet in its inseparableness, there

Is no ‘together’.

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28 Responses to Tracing Desire Lines

  1. Nice one, it’s a touching poem. Which enclosed sadness in the last line. Thank you for sharing.

  2. pure2core says:

    I wonder how excellently you put up words to make one understand your feeling.. Amazing..Thanks a lot for share friend..May god bless you..

    • jagring says:

      ahh.. in sentences maybe :D. (kidding). I prefer the flow as it is really, as oppose to mincing it to fit the occasion right. Thanks you very much..!!

  3. Jack Edwards says:

    A captivating poem and I especially like the candle imagery.

    Here is my entry: http://www.jackedwardspoetry.blogspot.com/2011/12/sorry-performance-poem.html

  4. Taylor says:

    soft and lovely imagery…

  5. kez says:

    strange how candle light can reignite memories …beautiful thank you x

  6. Cherlyn says:

    I love the comparison to life/death to a candle, it suits it well. So warm, lively, until it either burns out or is extinguished – makes something that can be so powerful seem so fragile.

    Thank you for sharing!

    Here’s mine for the rally: http://cursemymetalbody.wordpress.com/2012/01/19/poetry-thursday-74/

  7. ~L says:

    I agree… more than yo could possible know. I felt the connection so deep with this poem…
    very powerful piece!
    ~L

  8. poetryroad says:

    The thing that strikes me about this poem is the way you have cleverly encompassed the circle of life! Nice job!

    http://poetryroad.wordpress.com/2012/01/28/together/

  9. An evocative poem that managed to convey considerable depth. I thoroughly enjoyed reading it 🙂

  10. Summer Rain says:

    thought provoking,

    🙂

  11. Brindle says:

    It’s quite cool…means comparing life and death around a Candle…just awesome…:)

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