Unsinkable Boats

Truth be told, when it rains you’re bound to get wet,

And there’ll remain not a trace of those labouring sweat.

As this blazing sun pinches my eye,

Renders a blast of glare; blinding me from all obviousness.

 

Our castle we’ve adorned with the prettiest,

And tuned it right up to the minutest details

And I hugged you tight by the shore, admiring our castle,

Little knows to us, that it was built on wet foundations.

 

‘Tell me what happened’, this crippled heart crawled out of bed,

Gazing towards the open field; the once perfect life,

Now bears scratches and scars, victim of its ruthless path.

Flooding the sea, with unsinkable boats of overpowering emotion.  

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26 Responses to Unsinkable Boats

  1. pure2core says:

    some how, my heart was burdened with sadness..”Flooding the sea, with unsinkable boats of overpowering emotion”
    You write amazing.. thanks for share….

  2. enjoyed it.

    great expression….

  3. A lot of insight in this write. I could almost feel the sad wondering and feelings of loss at the end. A getting to the end and wondering what had become of the dreams. Nice writing!

    http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2011/09/19/fragile-cloth-2/

    • jagring says:

      When you have dreamed of something, so much, and have strived for it, then to see all that effort turn futile, really leaves a person with bagful of emotions, unsure what to make of it..!!

  4. “Gazing towards the open field; the once perfect life” Beautifully expressed! Loved the poem

  5. Kay Salady says:

    “flooding the sea with unsinkable boats of overpowering emotion” Very good writing with deep feeling.

  6. very creative piece…

    Thanks for sharing.

  7. Nicole says:

    Really like that last line.

  8. Factual and realistic, the raw power of truth.
    Isadora

  9. Lu Ann says:

    The last phrase is amazing. It´s heart warming.
    Thanks for sharing!

    Happy Rally

  10. powerful ending.

    please comment to let us know after you are done returning favors and making a minimum 18 comments,

    Happy Rally.
    Thanks a ton for the beautiful entry and instant participation.

  11. blitzken says:

    “the crippled heart” A universal theme if ever there was one.

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